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100 word challenge, The Slow Grandma. By Karim

A few days back when I was driving to work. I got stopped at a red light. It was taking so long that I was late for work! Then I noticed in the blink of an eye. It was a senior, taking a walk. The senior was walking SO slow. It is like, she was going in slow motion. But I knew that someday I will be that fragile too. So I wait half an hour for the lady to walk over to the next block. But then she suddenly falls on the ground. I get out of my car to help her but she waves me back. She stands with all her might and walks off into the big great crowds of New York.

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  1. Jo BadgeFebruary 1, 2020 at 8:39 AM

    Hi Karim! What a lovely idea in your story that you wait for someone old and fragile as you know that it may happen to you one day.
    Can you check your first few sentences? They don’t quite make sense and your punctuation needs to be in the right place to help it sound right when read aloud. Perhaps a friend can read it out loud to you?

    I like the way you used capitals to emphasise how slowly they were walking.

    Well done and keep writing!
    Mrs Badge
    Napier class, Catherine Junior school, Leicester UK

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